And now: a Pantoum for the Stars

East sky by daita saru is licensed under a Creative Commons Attribution 4.0 International License.
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East sky by daita saru is licensed under a Creative Commons Attribution 4.0 International License.

A couple of writing-blogging colleagues have been posting a poem that is in the form of a Pantoum.  Getting up my courage I decided to give it a try!  The poem below is meant to be 4 stanzas, each stanza of four lines, in case your viewing device does not quite show it that way … don’t miss the note at the end of the poem about the Pantoum and what it is!

February Evening in the Stellar Tabloids

In homage to Denise Levertov’s poem “February Evening in New York”

In February the stars began to swirl,
East sky, west sky: more life tonight!
Orion darted after the Pegasus, and
Cassiopeia embraced the dragon Draco.

East sky, west sky:  more life tonight!
The Big Dipper caught the cat’s eye nebula in its cup,
Cassiopeia embraced the dragon Draco,
Scorpio trailing in their wake.

The Big Dipper held the cat’s eye nebula in its teeth,
Canus Major chased Ursa Minor,
Scorpio traveling in their wake, and
Perseus took Andromeda’s hand for a kiss.

Canus Major chased Ursa Minor through the lagoon nebula.
Perseus danced with Andromeda to Brahms’s 2nd waltz, and
Orion caught the Pegasus and flew to the veil nebula on vacation.
In February the stars spinned light matter into the night sky.

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West Sky: While the sky whirls away by Derek Σωκράτης Finch is licensed under a Creative Commons Attribution 4.0 International License.
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While the sky whirls away by Derek Σωκράτης Finch is licensed under a Creative Commons Attribution 4.0 International License.

Thank you to Sangbad of Thoughts of Words: You motivated me to try a Pantoum after your lively and eerie “The Plea of Sinbad: A Pantoum.” Thank you also to kiwinana of Ramblings of a Writer, for your persistence in writing Tanka and Pantoum, especially the Cinderella Pantoums. And thank you to Anne J. of I think, I say, I do, for reminding me that we creatives need to try something new, something outside our comfort zone, and to not be stopped by fear of failing.

More information about Pantoums here.  I took a few liberties in my Pantoum regarding the wording in my repetitions.  But, I’m only trailing in the footsteps of the wonderful poem, “The Waking,” by Roethke.  – Roethke’s poem is a villanelle, not a Pantoum, but I love that he takes the repetitive form and makes it his own!

… hmm, maybe I’ll have to try a villanelle next!  Poets, any thoughts?  🙂

Here is Denise Levertov’s “February Evening in New York” poem, courtesy of the Poetry Foundation.  You should try their “Poem of the Day” subscription!

8 thoughts on “And now: a Pantoum for the Stars

  1. Wow Ma’am you’ve done it fine…the refrain line just got with the flow of the poem as if I as reader seeing the clear sky in February through your lines…am honored that I have been able to inspire you to write a Pantoum…and as far the liberty goes, according to me, I think we can take s’time liberty to express ourselves. Like in Haiku many of the times 5-7-5 can’t be maintain. So the liberty is okay. Please go ahead with Villanelle,..I had already tried once–Villanelle of Catharsis of an Insomniac Soul (posted 6th Feb ’17)…you can read it & get again inspired…will be waiting for your Villanelle….

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  2. My pleasure, only my pleasure, my dear friend! 🙂
    Now, as much as I may have encouraged you, having read this, and remembering Kiwinana’s Cinderella Pantoum, I am struggling to bring myself to even think that I can possibly do this. But then again, my head and stomach have been problematic for the last 2 days. I should read Sangbad’s Pantoum and maybe I will be brave. 🙂
    This is amazing, Theresa! I looks so difficult. But it reads so beautifully!

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  3. I remember when I was in grade school, I was really attentive in our Science class. I was fascinated by constellation and anything about the Universe. Those names are really familiar! Beautifully written, well done!

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